<blockquote rel="imeetr">Hello, can someone check my essay
WRITING TASK 2
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.
<i>" Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that a women is solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads to an idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up."</i>
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
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Here's my essay:
Children are blessings from God, they are the product of reproduction of two individuals. Offsprings has the right to be properly raised by two responsible people, such as parents.
Mostly people has a dream of having a family of their own and it is composed of a mother, a father and a child. Some of us believe that in the absence of any of these human beings, is not considered as a family. It can also be argued that in some instances, which our beyond our control, such as separation of couples or voiding their marriage vows, is not a hindrance in raising individuals like our children in the most holistic approach.
However, we can never deny the fact that paternal love is irreplaceable by a motherly love, both has it's own meaning and has a huge effect towards child's behavior and perception in life. Fatherhood has a different level of responsibilities, approach and contributions in nurturing their children's future as compared to motherhood.
In addition to that there are some aspects in building child's characters, that can never be substituted by a mother's way, such as manly talks, reasoning and other intellect that only men understands and conveys.
Ultimately we have to consider that people has different points and views in deciding whether couples are ready to have a baby, both parents must have a clear state of mind, when entering into this big responsibility in their lives. I believe that Father's has an equal importance, as of the mother's in bringing up and taking care of their children. They have an obligation to sustain and enrich the lives of their child, to become an individual that has the value of building a good family, thus empowering them to have a significant role and be a good members of the society.
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Kindly check this essay of mine, for any errors. Thanks!
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Hello, as per sa grammar book, you should only use "SUCH" if your listing an examples. So my suggestion, instead of "such as parents" to "like parents"..