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Nowadays the numerous television programs that show explicit words and contents are continuously growing. It has influenced the younger minds which resulted into a downside of their attitude(s).
Truly these days, different telecast(s) (have) been showing unwanted scenes through their various shows. Broadcasting networks create too much violence that can be seen, even on some cartoon fanfare. These can greatly affect the small minds in understanding and adapting the idea(s). This kind of media platform can instill(delete "ed") negative behaviour to the little ones.
In addition to that(,) a long term immersion(deleted ",") of showing negative audio-visual presentation to children can lead to imitation of it. For example, watching a fighting scene from a movie can affect the way they would think. Children’s mind (are) still undeveloped to fully understand and grasp the idea. They can unconsciously inflict physical harm or aggression towards (their) peers.
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However the government itself must take a lead. They must implement tougher laws in regard with television line-up. The different networks as well, should revamp the contexts of the ideas(delete ",") they want to convey through their programs. It should be (the) kind of shows that will benefit the viewers of all ages. Not just concentrating (on) having a good return(delete ",") of investment to their business.
I certainly believe that this pressing issue in monitoring programs in television must be controlled for the betterment of the whole population. The role of both parents and government is very important. Working together on this situation (delete ",") might result (delete "ed") into a peaceful and crimeless society in the future.